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To recap, three basic points of view exist: first person, third person, and omniscient. Select one POV and stick with it. You can access the archives for an in-depth look at each.
Within these, the writer must choose a character point of view (POV) to drive the scene. If you want to change character POV, move on to another scene. Take a look at this example from last week. I’ve inserted an error. See if you can spot it.
“Have some
juice.” John extended the orange juice pitcher.
Brenda didn’t
want juice. In fact, she didn’t want to be sharing a table with someone who had
betrayed her. Besides, she hated orange juice. And he knew it. Probably the
reason he offered it. “No, thank you.”
John thumped the
pitcher on the table, sloshing the juice over the top. Heat spread through his
chest like wildfire when he thought about the times he’d tried to please her
without success.
“Now you’ve done
it.” Brenda reached for a dishtowel. “If I’ve told you once, I’ve told you a
million times.”
“You’ve told me
what?” John scowled over his forkful of eggs.
“Clumsy.” Brenda
returned his scowl and reached for her fork. If she tried hard enough to ignore
him, maybe he’d take the hint and disappear. For good.
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We established last week that
this scene is told from Brenda’s POV. However, the way I’ve rewritten it,
Brenda is also a mind reader. Let’s take a look at the third paragraph.
John thumped the
pitcher on the table, sloshing the juice over the top. Heat spread through his chest like wildfire when
he thought about the times he’d tried to please her without success.
Brenda couldn’t have known the
highlighted portion about John. I head-hopped into John’s thoughts, which
detracts from the scene. Instead, I should have ended Brenda’s thoughts and
wrote another scene, if I wanted to share John’s thoughts with my reader. Here’s an example:
John gulped his
oatmeal. The lumpy mixture went down like a pallet of rocks. Didn’t this woman
know how to cook anything else? He glanced at her chomping through her toast
and oatmeal like a bulldozer. Wouldn’t do to ask for a bowl of cereal instead.
“Got plans for
today?” Her eyes bored through him like a woodpecker on a fresh branch.
“The usual.”
John didn’t want to spoil his surprise. He’d asked Cindy Martin to help him
pick out an anniversary present. If Brenda only knew how much he cared—maybe it
would change things between them.
“The usual? Does
that include another date with Cindy Martin?”
The oatmeal
lodged somewhere deep in his esophagus, sending a dull, throbbing ache through
his chest. A date? This woman was nuts!
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Though very basic, hopefully, the
preceding scenes have helped illustrate the differences between the characters’
POV.
Obviously, scenes are much longer
than this. You won’t write a dozen little scenes within a chapter. Two or three
long scenes are plenty. Make sure the main character gets the most scene time
since it’s his/her story. If you have any other questions about POV, please feel free to leave a comment. Also, I’d love to hear any suggestions for future writing topics.
I'm fairly new to your blog, so you may have already suggested this. There are a couple writers in the critique group I attend who are genius at spotting POV. This is a weak area for me, and I've enjoyed learning from them. Here is an explanation they gave that helped POV click with me:
ReplyDeleteLet's say your scene is told from Harry's POV. Imagine we strap a camera on Harry's head. The only things I can write about are what Harry takes in with his five senses: what he sees, what he hears, what he smells, what he tastes, and what he feels (this can be physical touch or emotions).
While in Harry's POV, I can't say, "Mary was very angry." However, I can show Mary's anger by describing how her face looks to Harry, "Mary bunched up her mouth and narrowed her eyes. The more she tensed her mucles, the more brightly her cheeks glowed." The reader would know by the description that Mary was angry.
I still get POV corrections, but this tip has helped me spot some of my own!
Great, informative posts, Laura! Enjoy learning from you!
Blessings,
Janey
Thanks for your suggestion, Janey. Most writers struggle with POV, not because we don't understand it, but because we know what our characters are thinking. Your description is a good one. It matters a great deal as to whether the character's face grew hot or reddened. You also touched on something I've mentioned before--the importance of a critique group/partner. Another set of eyes will catch POV when your own slide past the mistakes. Thanks for stopping by and adding to the discussion!
DeleteGreat stuff on POV!!! Love your blog Laura!! Holly
ReplyDeleteThanks, Holly. I'm glad it was helpful! Good to hear from you again.
DeleteHi Laura:
ReplyDeleteIt's so easy to change point of view without even realizing. This is very helpful. (I had to read through twice before I caught it.) It is much more difficult to catch our own writing mistakes.
Blessings,
Joan
You're right, Joan. That's why the revision process is so important, as is having a critique partner. I'm glad you stopped by and joined the conversation!
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